My holiday

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Sizzling water

Rotten eggs

Vintage

Heaps of us
Ecstatic

My Cousins,my Auntys,my uncles,my nanas and papas

Watching a movie

Going to the Ngawha springs

Table tennis

Going to waitanga on the waka

Eater hunt

Playing bat down

Playing on the ipad

Kapa haka

On the holidays I when to my nana’s

                           went

house.             

We when to ngaw school to stay there with

     Went      Ngawha

our famliy. When we got there me and all of

     family

our cousins where playing table tennis in

                    were

the games room, it was so fun. On friday

we went to waitanga on the waka. it was

                 waitangi

amazing. When we went on the waka we

were paddleing out in the deep. while we

        Paddling                            W

were in the deep we all most crashed into

the other boats. When my Uncle tryed to

                                                   

turn the waka around he brock paddle but it  

                                     Broke  the

was very scray. On Satrday we were doing

              Scary       saturday

a eater hunt. it was cool. but when my

  Easter        I     B             

Auntys and Uncles were hiding the eggs  

Aunties          

we had to do kapa haka first, but it was

Boring. After the easter hunt we went to the

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ngaw  springs. on the way driving there Ngawha   S O

smelled like rotten eggs. When we got

there

it was so cool. My favourite pools were the

bulldog that was 44 digreas,and the baby

B                              Degrees

one that was 35 digreas and other one

                         Degrees

Is tanemauhut that is the one with mud in  

    Tane mahta

it. that one was 34 digreas and there is

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another one called the doctor because not

Very much people go in that pool. that one

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Was 45 digreas that one was really sizzling  

W          Degrees

Hot. On Sunday it was home time but I did

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Want go home. it was really fun but I really

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enjoy going to my nana’s house.    

Degrees    Tane Mahuta      Ngawha Aunties      Easter Saturday Scary   

Broke     paddling   Waitangi were

Family    went

It was easy drawing using a google draw.It was hard spelling the big words in my writing.

Question:What did you do in the hoildays.