Walt:We are learning to write,edit and recraft our writing.
Text- To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page.Then I wrote my story underneath.The green writing shows the editing I have done and the red parts show what mr Masters helped me with.
Sizzling water
Rotten eggs
Vintage
Heaps of us
Ecstatic
My Cousins,my Auntys,my uncles,my nanas and papas
Watching a movie
Going to the Ngawha springs
Table tennis
Going to waitanga on the waka
Eater hunt
Playing bat down
Playing on the ipad
Kapa haka
On the holidays I when to my nana’s
went
house.
We when to ngaw school to stay there with
Went Ngawha
our famliy. When we got there me and all of
family
our cousins where playing table tennis in
were
the games room, it was so fun. On friday
we went to waitanga on the waka. it was
waitangi
amazing. When we went on the waka we
were paddleing out in the deep. while we
Paddling W
were in the deep we all most crashed into
the other boats. When my Uncle tryed to
turn the waka around he brock paddle but it
Broke the
was very scray. On Satrday we were doing
Scary saturday
a eater hunt. it was cool. but when my
Easter I B
Auntys and Uncles were hiding the eggs
Aunties
we had to do kapa haka first, but it was
Boring. After the easter hunt we went to the
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ngaw springs. on the way driving there Ngawha S O
smelled like rotten eggs. When we got
there
it was so cool. My favourite pools were the
bulldog that was 44 digreas,and the baby
B Degrees
one that was 35 digreas and other one
Degrees
Is tanemauhut that is the one with mud in
Tane mahta
it. that one was 34 digreas and there is
T Degrees
another one called the doctor because not
Very much people go in that pool. that one
V T
Was 45 digreas that one was really sizzling
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Hot. On Sunday it was home time but I did
h
Want go home. it was really fun but I really
w
enjoy going to my nana’s house.
Degrees Tane Mahuta Ngawha Aunties Easter Saturday Scary
Broke paddling Waitangi were
Family went
It was easy drawing using a google draw.It was hard spelling the big words in my writing.
Question:What did you do in the hoildays.